I told its spokesman, Martin Mbugua, that other schools had commented on their own applicants once the students gave them permission, but he was unmoved. Kumar suggested that her grades might not have been quite high enough, but Mr.
Bauld contended that Princeton should have been swayed by her words.
“My heart broke, not because I was now stuck eating plantains by myself in the stinging sun, but because that boy experienced a level of poor I never knew.”Then she makes a startling statement that stopped both me and Mr. “I have never seen the United States as my country,” Ms. “I have never felt total patriotism to any country.
I do not instantly think of staying here to help ‘my home,’ because I do not consider the United States my home. “There’s always an attempt in some of these college admissions factories to smooth out a student’s edges,” he said.
What she does is that she listens very carefully to what you have assigned her to do, and as a response to that, she says, ‘Well, let me ask you this! Kumar will take the stage as Marty in the Bronx Science production of “Grease,” and she’ll collect her diploma on June 21. “She is that person who is always going to give an interesting answer, even to the most boring question,” he said.
In the fall, she’ll attend Cornell, for which she wrote no essays about the university’s level of affluence.
The Earth is ‘my home.’ ”To Monica Inzer, Hamilton’s dean of admission and financial aid, bold declarations like this one are a strong sign of authenticity if nothing else. “But what I loved about this piece is that there is no attempt to smooth out anything.”As for Ms.
“Lots of essays have been doctored or written by other people,” she said. Kumar, the 18-year-old Princeton applicant, her essay wasn’t so much smooth as it was slick, gliding effortlessly from her breakfast table to the manicured campus of Princeton to the “occidental bubble” of her school classroom.
“It’s a bold move to critique the very institution he was applying to,” said Mr.
Bauld, who also teaches English at Horace Mann School in New York City.